100 WC Week #3



  By:MontyTheMouse 
                                                                   The Crocodile Hunt
                   It was a horrifying day I was  going for a crocodile hunt. Hurry up Max we don't wanna miss the hunt! My mom said so we went to the car and drove as fast as purple lightning then... the police gave us a fine for speeding so we paid for it and we drove normally we were there the professor was waiting at the door and was staring at us wait we have an excuse we were speeding and got stopped by the police so it was difficult to get here 30 minutes later we saw a crocodile...

                                         

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  1. Unknown28 September 2017 at 20:24

    A crocodile is a great idea for a story. You start off really strong but then you have a very long run-on sentence. Be sure to break up your sentences with periods. Read it over out loud and to a friend and notice were you pause then put a period at that place to create a sentence.

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