100 WC Week #10

                                                     


                                                               The Thieves


We walked upon a little kid with 50 dollars in his hand. They were loonies and toonies so we snatched it out of his hand. "RUN!" I yelled trying to cover my face from the little kid. All of a sudden we hear a siren and we run to our tree house.  "Could this be the police?" I wondered. "Hide the money so they don't suspect it is us! But where will we hide it all?" hmm... "Right! In that bush!" as I point from a distance away from us. The police go door to door asking questions. "Hey!" The police found us. They asked questions and they zoomed right off. We wondered what the little kid would've done with the money...

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  1. Unknown19 November 2017 at 22:30

    Your beginning and ending work well together and tie up your story. Some parts are confusing like who would he be able to hold $50 is loonies and toonies in his one hand without some difficulty. I can tell you are trying to use more dialogue in your writing with the correct punctuation. Keep working at it. Remember ever time a new person speaks to start a new line.

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